jusummerhayes

Good morning 🌧️

I'm up.

It's, err, bloody early: 5.01 am to be precise.

Sadly, it was another disturbed night's sleep; the rain didn't help.

But, hey, I'm here, coffee poured — the same Ethiopian brand that I can't stop drinking — and that's a blessing.

What's arising this morning?

This:

Sorry if you can't watch the video — broadband issues and all that — but all the great man is saying is don't let your writing becoming f_ boring. To be precise, somewhere towards the end of this video he says something like this:

"When you write, your words must go like this: 'Bim, Bim, Bim - Bim, Bim, Bim - Bim, Bim, Bim - Bim, Bim, Bim.' Each line must be full of a delicious little juice. Flavor. They must be full of power. They must make you like to turn a page. 'Bim, bim, bim.'"

Is my writing like that?

No.

It's largely lawyer speak dressed up in faux clarity, and it has to stop. 

But, seriously, I need stop writing such long sentences, using words (very often) that most people wouldn't dream of using, save a few stuffed shirts, and I need to let go. 

One of the problems (...confession time) is that I'm apt to use a lot of profanity in my ordinary, everyday speech. It's not pretty, and sometimes it's definitely used for effect but on the page, well, I'm very conscious of my Regulatory Body and the possibility, that has happened to a few people, of being sanctioned and/or struck off. I realise I could use an alias but trust me, lawyers being lawyers, I'd quickly get found out. Does that mean I can't write something juicy absent the profanity? Not at all but it does mean I need to use shorter sentences and spend much more time on the rewrite.

Where this little morning insight takes me I don't know. I've got a piece in draft ready for this week's essay on Patreon (see below) and I need to hold Buk's advice close to my chest unless I want to bore the pants off my putative readers.

Anyhow, today will be the last day of my work week. I've got a meeting first thing where I'll have to redraft a commercial settlement agreement and thereafter I'm working with a colleague on an Italian job — no, not that one — but it's otherwise going to be a quiet day (fingers crossed).

What are you up to today?

Blessings,

Ju.

❤️

Photo by Chris Liu-Beers on Unsplash


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